Thursday, 1 July 2010

Narrative written by Alex


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Tamati and Sam heard a sound. It went: “Beep,beep,beep.” Tamati and Sam got down , got low and got out fast. They yelled: “Fire, fire, fire.”

They used their escape plan. They told mum they were super heroes because they used their escape plan. Mum was happy that they used the escape plan.

They went to the mail box and dad rang the firefighters.
The fire fighters came and put out the f ire out. They had to move to a new house. They were safe and lived happily ever after.

2 comments:

Nelya Rm 2 said...

HI THERE,
I READ YOUR STORY ABOUT THE FIRE AND THE FIRE FIGHTERS, IT WAS REALLY SAD THAT THE FAMILY HAD TO MOVE TO ANOTHER HOUSE BUT I THINK YOU HAVE VERY GOOD WRITING SKILLS ALEX!

NELYA ROOM 2
TAMAKI INTERMEDIATE.

Jennifer said...

Alex,
You did a great job writing your story about the fire. I agree that it is sad that the family had to move to another house, but they are lucky that they got out of the house safely. What were your characters thinking when they were in the fire? Were they scared? I can't wait to read more of your writing! Thanks for sharing.
-Jenny B. (a teacher in NYC)